need suggestions for new fanfic!!

ok.. so i edited the stuff because my chapters cant fit in one post.. now i'm making a short but kinda meaningful one.. so just give me suggestions about it

Chapter 2
New Dunderheads

Loopy: oh why.. hello.. i'm new here in DS nice meeting you all
KingV: oh why.. hello.. i'm new here in DS nice meeting you all
Stoop: oh why.. hello.. i'm new here in DS nice meeting you all
Drew: oh why.. hello.. i'm new here in DS nice meeting you all
Caspian: oh why.. hello.. i'm new here in DS nice meeting you all

Orochi: This sounds bad.. Robot Macros! I must call Yukino
Yukino: Dont call me.. I was here looking at your cute little toy
Orochi: Dont harrass my [s]nude[/s] new figurine..
Yukino: Oh does it [s]masturbate??[/s] ZOMFG.. what is happening?
*hugs Orochi*
Yukino: Orochi.. i-im... scared.. i'm saying things.. i cant control it.. is it a bug?..
Orochi: stop being so emotional..
Dare: dont worry yuki.. i'll always be here for you
Flo: are you stupid or what.. can't you notice that there was a new bug.. The DS is
infiltrated!! Oh... and Dare... would you mind closing your pants.. i'm seeing your
underwear..
Dare: *blushes* there.. done.. closed it.. happy?
Flo: trying to act as the sarcastic, smart, son of a bit-ch eh? it doesn't look good..
and remember Marina doesn't like sarcastic guys...
Dare: ahuh..
Yukino: *surprised* oh.. i thought......
Orochi: w00t.. 0.0 lets get going.. we need to know whats really happening.. Dare check
who's online
KingV: ehem.. ehem.. Mr. Yamata No Orochi there has been a problem in the 1st until the
469th Server.. the 470th and last server is starting to be destroyed
Thundercracker: based on this.. i think theres a traitor o.O someone has been stealing
information and I think he's a moderator O.O
WiiVenom: Your right Thundercracker.. its a moderator..
*silence then...*
but remember even Kud can hack the system..
Flo: Oh.. marina.. hi.. so your back eh?
Marina: oh yes.. and I really missed you dare.. and oh.. who's this guy
KingV: *blushes furiously* OMG.. a hot chick..
Marina: i hear that every time.. now lets get going..
----
hm... nice meeting you gentlemen and hot ladies of course.. I see that even after I hacked
the system of DS a year ago.. nothing has changed.. well except of course that your whole
database is destroyed
KingV: and who are you?
Quickbrownfox: oh.. you haven't known me????? a primarch of higher evil is not treated like
this.. i'm QBF.. and i'm here to regain DS in my clutches
***Mooooooo***
**
Unholy: *facepalm*
Mangix: *facepalm*
Skyking: *facepalm*
Flo: o.O oh god.. this threesome is so getting dead later
**
Nidoking: oh hi qbf.. want some triplenachobbqwithjalapenoandbluelettuces???
QBF: OMGWTFIMPAWNEDAGAINBYTHATSTUPIDPOKEMON
Flo: qbf.. i thought you were learning something... STOP doing your jokes.. you sound like
a dunderhead
Dark_3: Speaking of DUNDERHEADZ... ive made my all new... Pink and... *ahem* Royal
Purple Lazor.. that would STFU him..
Flo: nice one.. and qbf.. before I kill you with this one... i wanna tell you ever since
that your speech was lame, your outfits are out of this world, your a dunderhead, and
my dog loves you...
QBF: oh shi------... g2g then
***Quickbrownfox is offline***
Caspian: *breathing heavily*its good I reached you before.... ---OMG!! its... KingV!!...
dont trust that guy he is under the command of Folechno
KingV: i knew it.. ever since Caspian.. i knew you were the traitor.. you deserve to die!!
Sloonz: lets stop this fight.. lets settle this out in the form of Competition..
whoever kisses Marina the best is not the traitor..
Marina:*blushes so red*
KingV: *kisses Marina*
----*dare suddenly appears and screen goes black* Rated R. Scene.. you can watch the full
video of there kiss/ [s]steamy scene[/s] in the Yukochi~~DVD.. Just for Adults 13+ only
**a small number of claps**
Marina: *hmpp.. how dare you.. *slaps KingV*
KingV: T_T marina.. i think i'm inlove..
Caspian: Marina.. lets settle this.. **pushes Marina on the wall**..
**woooohhhh.. *whistles* **
**a big round of applause**
Thundercracker: dang.. why does Caspian always get what he wants..
WiiVenom: oh God.. Marina's so hot
Sloonz: oh.. lets see.. caspian wins.. **whispers:** and i get to see Marina's legs..
mwahahahahahha
KingV: oh Gawd.. i lost again.. well i think i cant last this long Folechno is waiting for
me..
Orochi: w00t!..
KingV: TiberiumLord, nooby killer lets end this off..
KingV: Marina, i will miss you.. always remember that I will be there for you.. i love you..
Dare: you wont get Marina from me..
**but KingV kisses Marina**
-It looked like this

Background Music Plays

When I see your smile
Tears run down my face I can't replace
And now that I'm strong I have figured out
How this world turns cold and it breaks through my soul
And I know I'll find deep inside me I can be the one.....
**
Folechno appears..
Folechno: i thought you were my faithful servant KingV.. all the time you were doing my commands out of FEAR..
Lets go tiberium and nooby.. Choose your side DS members.. Me and Victory or THEM!
*looked disgustedly at orochi*
Folechno: i'll finish you off NOW.. **katon gokakyu no jutsu**
Tiberium, Noobykiller: **whisper Katongouryuukanojutsu**
Flo: you will never win..
Folechno, tiberium, n00bykiller: see you.. in hell..
**the place erupts in flames**
-to be continued-

Chapter 3 - The search for Drew

Before Folechno disappeared he grabbed Orochi and Yukino... Caspian ran after them and at
the end Folechno disappeared with Caspian, Orochi and Yukino.. It was getting weirder..

Folechno: hmm.. maybe I should change that line now
Long ago in a distant land, I, Folechno, master of all ninjas, unleashed an
unspeakable evil! But a foolish Samurai warrior wielding a magic sword stepped forth to
oppose me. Before the final blow was struck, I tore open a portal in time and flung him
into the future, where my evil is law! Now the fool seeks to return to DS, and undo
the future that is Folechno!

**meanwhile**
the remaining DS members Dark_3,Sloonz,WiiVenom,Thundercracker started noticing the damage that was done to the DS site
Dark_3: oh shi- Flo.. Orochi.. Yukino.. Dare.. Caspian.. Marina.. KingV.. where did they go?
Sloonz: I dunno.. this Folechno guy is getting annoying
Thundercracker: dont forget that captain_tesca guy..
WiiVenom: i'll kill him later.. he makes me sound like some perv.. if only I knew where
he lives...
Sloonz: Dont bother.. his going to the other dimension
Dark_3: FFFUUU.. look what they left for us
[moment of silence]
kesgaea: hi.. were FOLECHNO's clean up gang..
Varunshenoyg: yeah... were supposed to kill the remaining people
Sopas: hmm.. TODAY... WE DINE IN HELL... 3 Spartas against the whole DS... we will defeat
you!!!
**
Unholy: Lolwut
Mangix: Pathetic
Skyking: Lolwut XD
Flo: *Facepalm*
**
Sopas: for sparta!!!!
Dark_3: you really ought to be running right now
Thundercracker: It gets annoying how you fanatics will try to kill us
WiiVenom: haha.. let them say what they want to say..
Sloonz: because thats the last time they will say that
**Kesgaea and varun disappears**
sopas: oh.. kes.. varun.. umm.. its getting spooky round here.. help me please.. i meant
please??..
Dark_3: badluck XD
Thundercracker: yeah..
*sopas runs*
WiiVenom: lets go back to work then..
---
*In a deserted alley*
Orochi: w00t.. where are we??
Yukino: o-orochiii... i-i'm.. s-scared...
Caspian: where did we jus----
*black string hits caspian*
Yukino: nooo... caspian!!
Tiberium: he didnt even notice that were gonna hit him with this..
Nooby: haha XD
Caspian: *cuts string with dagger* *iris turns red* i'm okay.. dont worry i cut it in time
Folechno: *whispering* finally.. your mine Caspian..


*In the desert*
Marina: OMG its getting spooky... brrr.. i feel cold >_<
KingV: Dont worry Marina.. take my Coat.. it might help you.. at least..
Dare: oh.. and wear this gloves.. so you'll feel comfortable..
Marina: *blushes* thanks
Flo: now where are we..
Flo: this is supposed to be Dare's fault and I double posted again
KingV: its not the point.. we need to get out of here as soon as possible
Dare: look.. i think i see a fountain.. comeon lets have a drink
*ground rumbles*
Dare: omg.. wait.. hide in here
Crash: Pika??
Burn: Chu??
Marina: oh.. your so cute... lets take care of him..
**CrashAndBurn Smiles with a wicked smile [whispering] mwahahahahaha**
Dare: wait.. it smiled! that wicked smile.. dont touch it marina *pushes crash*
Marina: 0_0
Dare: *pushes burn*
Marina: now your really annoying me
Flo: stop having love quarrels there.. Dare.. i know you want to have a new pet but dont
result in this kind of style.. your getting lamer and lamer this days dare.. i swear..
i'm gonna kill you when we get back to DS
CrashNBurn: haha.. stupid marina
Marina: OMG... a talking stuff toy?
CrashNBurn: -__- i'm sent here by Folechno to kill you
Dare: No.. get out of our way we need to get out of this place!
KingV: How do we get out of here!!!
CrashNBurn: i'm not supposed to tell you that the portal to DS is located in the Scourge
ba--- you didn't hear anything.. i repeat.. you did not hear anything
Flo: imma dispatch you now
Dare: Flo.. dont
Flo: i'm not stupid like you dare
CrashNBurn: hmm? i have a big arsenal of spells to defeat you...
Flo: if its that many.. enumerate it to us.. or your just one of those puny posers
Flo: haha.. so what now??
Flo: i'm waiting.. dont waste my time.. i'm not like Dare that's so stupid to let you kill
him
Dare: oh yeah.. Flo.. are you girl or wut?
Flo: o_O
Dare: oh noes.. dont give me that face
Flo: 0_0
Dare: ok ill shut up
Flo: Good.. sometimes I forget that i'm your friend so pardon me when I suddenly stitch your
mouth in a barbie or power ranger pat---...
Dare: ok ok
Flo: next time dont interrupt me.. or you will see the last of Marina
CrashNBurn: done?? i thought you were girlfriends.. haha.. turns out Flo has a boyish manner
so maybe his not really a boy.. errm get it?.. boyish manner maybe not really a boy.. haha
or girlish manner not really a girl.. haha.. *back to the spell thing then*
so ive got lightning blast, fireball......
Flo: o_O you dont know my gender.. if you will ever know it.. i will make sure you will die
CrashNBurn: ill put down this teletubbie.. if you ever dare move its gonna blast you with
100000... volts electricity.. omg theres too many zeroes.. i'm counting my spells k?
*Crash counting.... 1) lightning blast 2) fireball......*
KingV: you know its really stupid of him to try to guard us using this stupid teletubbie
Marina: i think so too.. but dont move.. it can be deceiving
Dare: oh shi-- im out of here
*Dare runs*
Pinky(Teletubbie): where dya think ur going sir
Dare: i'm off to kill some neutral camps.. i'm bored..
Pinky: No..
**dare gets shocked**
Dare: awww...
Flo: i still remember when you were a kid.. your butt is always being blasted by your stuff
toy..
Dare: but my stuff toy didn't have lazors *eyeing Flo*
Flo: wut??
Dare: nothing
Flo: you thinki----.. sshiii----
*flo has been carried by a big sandstorm*
Dare: Floo!! Runs..
*dare gets shocked by Pinky*
Dare: awwwwwww..
Marina: no.. even Flo.. *tears falling down the cheek*
Dare: *hugs marina* dont worry i will take care of you
Marina: *crying silently* you know.. i really loved you dare.. i was wonderin' if you
ever had.... if ever you loved me...
Dare: i always loved you marina.. as a friend..
KingV: marina... its okay.. we will find Flo later..
Pinky: uhh.. how sweet
*tears fall down to Pinky*
Pinky: NOOOOOO!!!!!
*pinky explodes*
CrashNBurn: *talking to himself loudly* right! thats the effect of my 50) soul crash then we
have 51) chronoblast 52) firewall 53) fire booger, 54) monstercrush
**Marina, kingV and dare escapes**
CrashNBurn: 55) stomp 56) treeform.. ugh this is getting nowhere
CrashNBurn: where are the prisoners??.. NOOO how dare they.... shi---
CrashNBurn: oh.. Pinky.. your not supposed to get wet right.. cause anyone who holds you
will be electrified.. **holds pinky**
CrashNBurn: [electrified] [fainted]
Dare: ok.. so.. lets pass by here its safer around this part
Akasha: new victims i see.. yahahaha
Akasha: come with me.. or you'll die the painful way
Dare: we wont!
Akasha: lets see.. i'll kill your girlfriend then..
Dare: STOP!! DONT!! NOOO!!....... and she's not my girlfriend... hihi..
Akasha: blinks to Marina.. **sonic wave**
Meanwhile----
Room Chat 33 in Garena
Josh (Akasha): lolwut.. why are there 3 humans here -_- and Akasha.. dont cast sonic wave
on them.. your supposed to cast that on the running Yurnero
Last_dota_freak (yurnero): yay i escaped
Folechno (Zeus): wait yurnero
Last_dota_freak (yurnero): wut?
Folechno (Zeus): thundergods
Folechno pawned Last_dota_freak for 1000 gold.. Assists: Josh
Last_dota_freak (yurnero): omgwtfbug!!!
Josh (Akasha): KS -_-
Folechno (Zeus): grrrr why are you still sitting around there.. your supposed to take out
the survivors in DS site
Josh (Akasha): we sent the cleaning group.. they clean out the survivors right?
Last_dota_freak (yurnero): *facepalm*
Folechno (Zeus): OH SHI----- WTH did you do that??
-to be continued-

Chapter 3 - Folechno's Mini-Game - Survival!!

Folechno: Your fighting for your lives, this is all about living or
dying.. i knew it would reach this point.. you DS members were
so HUMBLE and GENEROUS... but how does it help you now?
Funny how your minds work.. The "Humble and Generous" DS
members are becoming like my minions.. haha.. funny shit about
values.. >_<
Se7en: So what do we do? are we supposed to kill each other?
Folechno: Ghost.. thats LAME, that's not my kind of GAME, and
Flo's dog loves you too..
Se7en: 0.0 its sarcasm stupid.. you really dont know.. i'm one of
the mysterious moderators that you can't understand cause your
busy reading Orochi and Yukino.. so STFU and tell me the
mechanics
TFS: yeah.. its getting boring.. that guy writing this is still finishing
chapter 4
CrashNBurn: Folechno?! why did you let me join this mini-game..
i'm not yet finished counting my spells 18) Juggle 90) Polymerize
31) Rage 456) epic annoyance..
Shimrra: haha.. funny... Epic annoyance is not a skill.. its a noob
tactic.. and btw.. go back to 1st grade and study your numbers..
you started in number 18 and went all the way to 456?? your
crazy...
CrashNBurn: No.. i'm not stupid..
SinClare: lets just start this.. that's simpler dunderheads
Folechno: 1) its an obstacle course
2) your not supposed to be hit by the rotten eggs
3) Hit your enemies.. every hit = 1 point.. first to reach 50 wins
Lets start then..
CrashNBurn: EPIC CHAOS!!! **farts**.............. awww...
TFS: **coughs** take this.. fire rings..
SinClare: oh shi---... *gets the fire extinguisher then remembers
that theres no fire extinguisher*
Se7en: that was stupid.. haha..
**Fire Ring hits Se7en**
Se7en: AWWW... FUC---
Folechno: TFS = 1 point
TFS: special move.. katongouryoomakyonojutsu
Folechno: are u sure thats a spell?? Lol.. i didn't even get to study
that... haha... maybe thats a fake.. haha
**Folechno gets hit by the fire**
Folechno: 0_0!!!!!! I'm not included.. remember.. this is FOLECHNO's
mini-game.. YOU FIGHT FOR YOUR LIVES NOT MINE... SO STFU AND
JUST FIGHT DUNDERHEADS
Folechno: TFS = back to 0
TFS: **squeak**
Se7en: **aww............**
Shim: **haha....**
Ghost: Preposterous
Se7en: ok.. i'll try this shooting star!!!!!!!
Folechno: Se7en = 1
Shim: 50 million rocks!!!!!
Folechno: **forms a barrier** Shim = 3
TFS: **omg.. i'm getting owned**
Ghost: **concentrate**........ TELEPATHY
TFS: AWWWW
Folechno: Ghost = 1
TFS: I wont GIVE UP!! SPECIAL ATTACK...
TFS: **fart**
Se7en: **fart**
Ghost: **fart**
Shimrra: **fart**
Folechno: **faints** [raises a white flag] all of you win
TFS: Yay...
Se7en: **blushes...** i farted too
Ghost: that was unhygienic and definitely not becoming of
royalty
Shim: FUC--!!
TFS: look at the bright side.. we know Folechno's weakness
Se7en: we can blackmail him so we can earn money in payment
for our silence.. HAHA!!
Shim: idiots!!.. why dont we tell this to the mods... -__-...
Ghost: thats precisely what i'm thinking about shim.. and that's
the perfect option..
**Josh, Last_dota_freak appears**
Josh: Yo Yo Yo dunderheads... PaladinJosh IS IN THE HOUSE!!! XD
Last_dota_freak: yeah right mah man.. my name is last dota freak!
XD
Folechno: LAME introduction
Josh: Prepare for trouble
Last_dota_freak: and make it double
Josh: To protect the world from devastation
Last_dota_freak: to unite all peoples within our nation
Josh: To denounce the evils of truth and love
Last_dota_freak: to extend our reach to the stars above
Josh: Jessie...
Last_dota_freak: James...
Josh: Team rocket blast off at the speed of light!
Last_dota_freak: Surrender now or prepare to fight!
Dare: MEEEEEEEEOOOWWWTH THATS RIGHT!
Josh: 0_0 haha.. FUNNY!
Last_dota_freak: your not meowth.. thats not how he speaks
Dare: oh.. sorry.. wrong scene
*** meanwhile
Unholy: LOLWUT XD
Maginx: Lame
SkyKing: LAMER XD
Keybi: haha.. Team Rocket and pokemon is so last year..
and Dare.. your supposed to be DARE right? (there)
Keybi: haha.. haha.. **noticed no one laughing** oh..
Unholy: personally that was the lamest scene i've ever scene
Maginx: go Dare! your our candidate for the Grammy Award for
lamest DS member
SkyKing: And i think your winning.. way to go dude
Keybi: you've reached new heights in lame stuff
*** back to the story
Folechno: stupid fools.. i told you that it was lame
Josh: but you wanted something lamer right
Last_dota_freak: see i quoted it... here..

Folechno (itachi freak) wrote: Lamer!!!

Josh: nice job James
Last_dota_freak: PAWNED you freakish ITACHI dunderhead
Folechno: i did not pay you to do this to me
Josh: at least Shim just paid us to do this to you!!..
Last_dota_freak: yeah... 20000 gold.. that pawns! ROCK ON!!
we can now buy 2 skadi's and 1 divine XD XD dont forget the 3
gg branches ^_^..
Folechno: NOOO!!!!!!!!!! ok.. that's done.. now illl get revaaange!!!!
(mispelled on purpose)
Folechno: **mystic force** come within me the power of Gods..
HAH!!! GODS STRENGTH
Se7en: crazy!
TFS: AWESOME!
Shim: absolutely DUMB
Ghost: Preposterous
Se7en: why dont we just go?
TFS: yeah.. why not
Shim: cause this is a fun movie to watch
Ghost: i've got webcameras so we can see them even if were at
DS
Shim: Nice one ghost
TFS: now were safe
**stalks off**
**folechno fights Josh and Last_dota_freak**
Folechno: done.. fast PAWNAGE for me.. haha.. nooblets..
Folechno: oh noes.. where did they go??.. this is all your faults..
you make me lose concentration.. NOOO
**at DS site**
Se7en: nice
Shim: Josh and Last_dota_freak will feel Folechno's wrath! haha
TFS: yeah boy
WiiVenom: whats that?
Ghost: my gadget..
Dark_3: awesome.. you get to see them!
Thundercracker: go go go Gadget boy! XD
Sloonzz: hey thunder.. you gave a new idea to Flo's Series of Strats!
WiiVenom: it fits perfectly with Tinker ^_^
Markzseg_05: btw.. nice gadget ghost
Ghost: I appreciate it
Markzseg_05: Cool!!
Markzseg_05: oh.. shi--- tezuka how dare you give me this lame
short speech... thats few -__-
Tezuka (me): ok then.. just dont go whine then
***
Keybi: shut up author..
Mangix: your not supposed to interfere
Skyking: yeah.. we're the members that are allowed to interfere
and your not included!!!
Keybi: and without Flo.. we interferers will RULE TEH WORLD!!!!
Keybi: MWAHAHAHAHAHHA
Unholy: Lolwut
***
+++
Authors Note: Sorry for Keybi's GREAT ANNOYING abilities.. its her
only ability since she lost the continuum transfunctioner and btw
she's desperate for ATTENTION... and another thing... dont feed [s]Keybi[/s] a gorilla.. [s]she[/s] it is an animal..
+++
-to be continued- :hysterical:

Why didnt you mention everything in a single post? I wish I could merge the posts but I got no powerz here.. Reminds me of poor Dohyun back in DS

Nice!Hey captain!

Nice! I was waiting for you to bring it here

And DS smileys don't activate here (well, some, it think xD)

Yep!I've been really become a fan of this Fanfic!

@VSG
the limit didn't allow me.. <_<
i'm just putting it in here for convenience
@mangix
i read your mind before i put this here and i have not forecasted that you were waiting for it.. it just means that your lying!!

How can you read my mind????? LOL.

I was waiting for it.... NUFF SAID... >w<

wow. you managed to put everything here. lolwut. nice story btw.

@rocky
i want to be a mod <_<
@maginx
enough said???!!! not really.. judging by what you said.. you are actually hesitating about my real abilities.. well i wont show it to you.. i dont want to befuddle and confuse your mind innocent being.. because you are not included in my war with the nemesis-dohyun.. its about to start and you must not interfere!!

You think too fast mortal (INTERFERE!!)

Of course I won't interfere, I never wanted to interfere, you just wrote my name down and me scripts D'OH.

@tezuka

well, im not teh admin and i dont have teh powers to promote ya. and dare said that we should ask fellow mods first before doing any actions. if you wanted, go tell dare18...

@rocky
okay okay..
@mangix
dont dare defile my good name.. you have done your part.. now its time you shut up because you have known too much..

Better than a thousand hollow words is one word that brings peace.

Peace?

@mangix
it was supposed to be silence.. that was my other self typing for me.. mwahhaaha.. lol.. i love fighting with dohyun xD
Edit:
srsly.. i wasn't even angry at you lol

No getting angry at each other please!this site if for the good and not the dark side!

@clare
it was just for fun lol.. <_< wasn't even serious
@readers
i think i can't post the chapters in here.. because of the page limit.. i'm just making a new one..
@dare
please lock this thread

lolwat you changed teh title ftw.

EDIT: Bah i have no powers in this forum. so cant lock..

@Tezuk: Obviously..

@others
now now.. wheres the suggestions? xD

Do you need another idea for a new fanfic or a new idea to put in your current fanfic?kinda confused sorry!

SINclare21 wrote:Do you need another idea for a new fanfic or a new idea to put in your current fanfic?kinda confused sorry!

I was gonna ask that...